Sunday, January 23, 2011

Fall from Grace.

So for those of ya who don't know, every Sunday for 2 months now I've been going to a writers workshop called Acentos writer. It caters more so to poetry but I feel it helps tremendously with my "free writing" style. Plus it always such a dope time spent. Anyway today's facilitator of the group was a young man named Raymond Daniel Medina, and he told us to write about "The Fall of Grace" (the story of Adam and Eve) and so that's what I did. I enjoyed the exercise very much and I learned about using more detail in my writing. We were told to write in the perspective of someone or various people in the story, so I want to share with ya what I wrote.
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I think I've got her. She knows the fruits from this tree are forbidden  but now she's considering her fall from grace, even though she doesn't know. She's going for it and I can see the innocence draining from her eyes without a single tear shed as she chews from the last bite she'll eve have in my garden. She's calling Adam over and he'll surely do as she asks of him. "Amazing" I think to myself, I've corrupted  two by simply speaking to one. This game will be easy, the game of taking over this world filled with weaklings and mindless mortals til this entire world beyond this tree is mine.
Adam reluctantly bites the apple. It's written all over his face that he knows he's done wrong. They've realized that they're naked, and that's my Cue. I've gotta go now, their Lord will surely return. He is their creator and now that they've been given that knowledge my work here is done.


Could it have been the dry scent of sweetness that made me do it? It was such a refreshing taste, the sound of it crushing between my teeth, the scent of my unknowing demise coming over me as I saw colors more vibrantly , heard the birds in the trees more clearly, saw he rays of the sun gracefully sneaking in through the empty space between the leaves  over me. Adam just HAD to share this euphoric experience with me. So I told him: "here Adam try this apple. I think I've just discovered the first drug!"


With a tone of authority, I have returned to my Garden. I find my children hiding, they do not realize, even with a new found knowledge that I AM the all knowing . I ask them "why do you hide?" They reply to me "because we're naked." "Who told you that you are naked?" I reply with a strong tone in my voice.... They are struck by silence. I now know that my children have disobeyed the only law that I have set in place. Is this what I can expect from all my children? Maybe the "Free Will" thing was a bad idea. However, "Adam, you and Eve shall no longer live in thine garden. You will wander this world as exiles of your beautiful home and bare a sign on your forehead letting everyone know that you are disobedient." They have looks on their faces that just break my heart/ But I have to be stern in my ways. They gracefully take their fall from grace and leave to a world where they will start wars, create famine, poverty and endure hate from it all. What have I created? I suppose I shall call it Humanity.


So yeah! lol, Hope ya liked it.


Stay Up and Stay Tuned.

4 comments:

MakeupbySoulangie said...

Go Eno I like this a lot. I think I should take up a class like this. Dope!

ENO ONE.... said...

WORD SOLY! I LOVE IT, IT'S FUN AND IT'S FREE. CHECK IT OUT WITH ME SOMEDAY. THANKS FOR THE COMMENT.

A said...

Really cool to see you at Acentos. So glad you come through. My church. :o)

ENO ONE.... said...

I'M GLAD THAT YOU INTRODUCED ME TO ACENTOS AND IT WAS GOOD SEEING YOU TOO!